Story

The originally written prologue (originally also the only thing I was going to try to stick to throughout the story) has now been changed. Initially, it was Carrington breaking down after all of the events had taken place, including the relief of the bodies that he took part in etc, but now it's John Portugee Phillips, the civilian miner, arriving from his long, epic ride across hostile Indian territory 240 miles in a blizzard, at Fort Laramie, to deliver the news of the massacre to General Palmer and his Officers there. Reality has, at this point, turned up with another great event too because when he at last arrived there, freezing cold and exhausted, there was a Christmas ball taking place near the Officers quarters so that means I can use lots of comparisons and contrasts ! Also, because of the day he arrives, I can also try and compare it to the three Kings in Bethlehem, following the star (in this case, the lights of the ball) and also Santa (in this case, John Phillips arriving with an almost white beard!) . That's if Santa was celebrated over there then....Have to check that ^^
I changed the whole Carrington thing because after writing his profile, I thought that I'd been working up to get him a big cover up for his truly worried and stressed personality so he comes across relatively calm and level headed to his men. Having him immediately break this facade would downplay all this it would be more dramatic if it was built up to, rather than said immediately.
Plus, I have to change some of the parts I've written already - namely the parts with Captain Brown in the first section, as I've written him as quite impatient and irritable about Powell who is riding with back from the wood train. In fact, he was quite good natured and happy go lucky so instead of acting so miserable around Powell like he is at the moment in the story, he's going to act pretty respectful around him but when Powell turns his back, he shakes his head like he thinks he's just a joke. This may be shared with some of the Officers with him. This change also kind of helps accentuate Fetterman's irritable personality.
Also on the subject of writing, I've added some parts that kind of suggest Carrington sent them out to the massacre. He was accused of that by a few people after the events and I think it's a really interesting take on it. Obviously, he was blamed for it by many people but to actually say he was the cause of it is slightly different. So, to reflect this, some of his feelings towards Fetterman are thrown out of context and perspective at some points, implying (or not, however it's taken) that he would send him to his death, or at least he wanted to. That sounds very dark but it makes it interesting ^^ An example of how exaggerated he gets now is that in their huge argument (the first real time Fetterman and Carrington actually have direct anger poured out to each other in front of one another), Carrington gets carried away and gives into true, furious feelings, hitting Fetterman. Fetterman doesn't say anything to anyone else after - purely because he doesn't really get the chance and plus, he's trying to get the command of the fort after Carrington is relieved (because of the reorganisation of the army) and the people investigating whether Carrington actually acting violently towards him would draw up the question of why he did hit him and this would reveal Fetterman's violent actions towards him and so on... - but Carrington gets even more paranoid he will.
A book that has really helped with is one I got for my birthday: Dee Brown's The Fetterman Massacre. Thankyou Dee, once again! :D